"Good,"
says the author at our building door,
"that there are no fires in Brooklyn."
But he is blind at 8:00,
and too easily persuaded by the dole of feminists
skinned by gabbling coins,
as good a donation as a hunger artist could hope for.
His only subjects of choice are
dopamine
and the sexual affections of male ballet dancers;
but he has never broached them in the same conversation.
This is why. This is why,
when we hear him talking about fire,
we are all thrown from the memory
of our standard/gather-round/assumed positions,
and why we all
flutter
to find vacant plots on the cement around him,
and whip out our lighters and dear cigarettes:
agile, self-mangling gunslingers,
we have been prepared for this pleasant novelty
—all day.














Comments
skinned by gabbling coins,
as good a donation as a hunger artist could hope for.
x Take out the / between assumed and positions; I think as it is, that little bit conveys the wrong meaning.
x At first agile, self-mangling gunslingers stuck out to me poorly, but after finishing the sentance, it's all good.
x Debating if I like the line separation and — at the ending; although, I am leaning toward like.
This is excellent. Quite different from what I've seen of your other work (which I still think you should post). Regardless, I'm probably going to have to fav this one.
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Is this about a girl or the United States?
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